Journal #13

Bennett: I think your resumes strong points have to do with the clean format you’ve chosen with your picture included and some nice looking visual fields that make the information less of a chore to read as an employer. I gladly read the full resume without hesitation because of its friendly formatting. However, I think the objective of the jobs you are seeking could be more clear. It sounds like you have plenty experience using different types of softwares from your gaming experience. It also looks like you understand business based on your completed courses. I think including the info that you did is a smart move, just apply the resume more to what you are applying for is my only advice.

Jack: This is my second time being able to work with you and provide my insight based on our contrasting styles. Like the cover letter, I think you do a good job of explaining your abilities very thoroughly. I think this trait about you can end up being a double edged sword because you are so descriptive that it gives the reader a good idea of the type of person you are, but at a certain point the amount of information can be subconsciously intimidating to read for someone skimming resumes. I believe that are moments in your resume that you could combine accolades that will get the same message across using less page to make your information more concise. If you could get your resume to a singular page I think it would play a big advantage when comparing your resumes to other people.

Wen: Honestly Wen, this resume looks quite flawless to me as far as formatting and looks go. I like the way you get your messages across as well, concise, professional, and informative. Your objective is clear and your accolades support you for the mission you are looking to accomplish with the document. My singular piece of advice would be to fix one part of your format where there is extra white space in between your professional experience and skills and abilities. On top of that adjustment, I would then say you have more space to include more things to help your case because of the extra space you will have to work with.

Journal #14

Yet again, having the group discussions with our classmates ended up being extremely helpful. I value hearing the opinions of others and my group was more than helpful with providing advice to improve my current resume. I understand that I have one type of writing style and my group mates have another. The different perspectives allow me to improve my documents in ways I wouldn’t have thought of before meeting with them. That tactic is super powerful because that’s exactly what’s happening when you submit your resume to an employer. The specific ways I plan on editing my current resume will be correcting minor formatting errors that didn’t occur to me to begin with, also cleaning up the wording I used that came across in a manner that I didn’t intend for. One major mistake I made was keeping my resume consistent with wording and formatting to keep it clean and nice to look at. It was super helpful to analyze the other resumes in my group as well because I was presented with ideas that I plan on stealing and using on my resume. One major change I plan on making is inserting my same resume into one of the templates offered by word to make it appear prettier.